Two wins in a day

FOUND ONLINE: On a day when the Miami Dolphins finally won two games in a row and took a step in the right direction, their offense continued its season-long trend of inconsistent play.

In this sentence, it looks like the Dolphins won two games on the same day. Let's do a slight re-write:

On a day when the Miami Dolphins finally won their second game in a row and took a step in the right direction, their offense continued its season-long trend of inconsistent play.

Most readers would have understood that sentence, but I like precision.

ALSO FOUND ONLINE: Griping subject matter coupled with intense film shoots all throughout the English countryside is what led Pitt to provide such a stellar assessment of Shia’s acting chops.

This is from an article about a Brad Pitt movie. I hope they meant "gripping," not "griping."

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