Tuesday, June 26, 2012

Fixing a mangled sentence

Found online: Everyone says they go the extra mile. Almost no actually one does.

 The first sentence is fine, but you need it for perspective. The second sentence needs help.

 Everyone says they go the extra mile. Actually, almost no one does.

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Monday, June 25, 2012

Yet another science edit

Found online: While all large galaxies are assumed to have black holes at their center, not all of those black holes produce quasars.

 Because galaxies and center go together, I would change that to:

 While all large galaxies are assumed to have black holes at their centers, not all of those black holes produce quasars.

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(the book of great NASCAR stories)
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