EDITOR@WORK: 2023

HEADLINE FOUND ONLINE: Hidden beneath Antarctic ice for eons, scientists have made a chilling ancient discovery.

I've written about this sort of thing before. It sounds like the scientists have been hidden beneath Antarctic ice for eons.

You might change it this way: Scientists have found a chilling ancient discovery hidden beneath Antarctic ice. You don't need ancient and eons in the same sentence; that's redundant.

I DO like the way they got chilling and ice together in the same sentence.

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FOUND ONLINE: How can a company whether that kind of storm?

How can a company weather that kind of storm?

ALSO ONLINE: Defensive back Vontae Davis #23 of the Indianapolis Colts brakes up a pass intended for wide receiver Devon Wylie #19 of the Kansas City Chiefs during the first half on December 23, 2012 at Arrowhead Stadium in Kansas City, Missouri.

I found this while looking for info on Devon Wylie's death. The cutline writer meant breaks, not brakes. (Captions are called cutlines in the newspaper biz.)

They put every bit of information in that one sentence, usually not a good idea.