Saturday, December 3, 2011

The writer is trying to do too much with this sentence

Found online: "They can't threaten it," said Schnellenberger, 77, who coaches the final game of his long illustrious career Saturday for Florida Atlantic against Louisiana-Monroe and who is best known for leading the University of Miami to the 1983 national title.

That last part, starting with who is best known..., should go in another paragraph. Howard Schnellenberger is best known...

He was also an assistant coach for the undefeated 1972 Miami Dolphins. Just saying.

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