Found online: Rookie Kicker Greg Zuerlein, whom was a perfect 13-13 from the field, missed three of his five field goals including the game tying attempt.
No, sorry. Let's try it again:
Rookie kicker Greg Zuerlein, who was a perfect 13 for 13 from the field before the game, missed three of his five field-goal attempts, including the game-tying attempt.
That's a lot of work for one sentence.
(I wonder if you need to say he's a rookie kicker; that's obvious from the rest of the sentence.)
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