Thursday, May 30, 2013

Whom was a perfect

Found online: Rookie Kicker Greg Zuerlein, whom was a perfect 13-13 from the field, missed three of his five field goals including the game tying attempt.

No, sorry. Let's try it again:


Rookie kicker Greg Zuerleinwho was a perfect 13 for 13 from the field before the game, missed three of his five field-goal attempts, including the game-tying attempt.

That's a lot of work for one sentence.

(I wonder if you need to say he's a rookie kicker; that's obvious from the rest of the sentence.)

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