Monday, September 21, 2015

Travel the world in

Found online: Meet John. He’s a 75-year-old man who built this awesome tiny house truck for he and his wife to travel the world in.
I don't like the use of he and his wife in this instance, and I don't like ending the sentence with in. So I'd change the last part of the sentence to "so he and his wife can travel the world."
It's not as awkward.

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Tuesday, September 15, 2015

Three TDs paces

Headline from Football Weekly: GRONK's THREE TDs PACES PATRIOTS IN OPENER

That's the drop head on the front page. The top headline was HOW'S THAT FOR STARTERS!

The problem I have is THREE TDs PACES. I would change the headline to GRONK'S THREE TDs PACE PATRIOTS IN OPENER.

Also the drop head is blue with silver trim. It fits the Patriots' color scheme, but it's hard to see over that photo of Gronkowski.

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