Monday, July 10, 2023

YOUNGEST OF WHOM

FOUND ONLINE: New details have emerged about the man facing murder charges for a shooting rampage in Philadelphia on Monday that killed five people, the youngest of whom was a 15-year-old boy.

Let's try again:

New details have emerged about the man facing murder charges for Monday's shooting rampage in Philadelphia that killed five people, including a 15-year-old boy.

It's still a run-on sentence, but it's tighter.

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