Showing posts with label better headlines. Show all posts
Showing posts with label better headlines. Show all posts

Tuesday, August 28, 2018

It's all electric

HEADLINE FOUND ONLINE: Electric car makers moving into Tesla’s turf with new models

I'm not sure you need to say electric car makers; if you're moving into Tesla's turf, it's all electric.

FOUND ON YOUTUBE: The Beat With Ari Melber | MSNBC | BRAKING NEWS Today

I know, I know; they just misspelled breaking. I felt the need to mention it, though. Braking news sounds like it involves stopping cars or trucks.

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Monday, May 28, 2012

Headline: Cat caught vs. cat survives

Newspaper headline: Cat caught in steel trap survives

This headline forced me to re-read it. "Cat caught in steel trap" is a nominal here, and I think it would read better this way:

Cat survives jaws of steel trap

Survives works better up front. What do you think?


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