KING FUNERAL

FOUND ON TWITTER: HMTQueen is unable to continue her duties Once she passes Charles literally becomes King Funeral 10dys from death in Westminster London after laying in State in Scotland Operation Unicorn & London Bridge are now starting.

The first thing my eye caught was Charles literally becomes King Funeral...

There's only one period in the whole thing, and Funeral began another sentence. Without a period it looked like Charles was called King Funeral.

A little punctuation would help.

PS: I assume that HMTQueen stands for Her Majesty the Queen.

FOUND ONLINE: The Coffee-drinking Psycopath

I think they meant Psychopath.

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1942, who outlived him

FOUND ONLINE: Reese was married to Dorothy "Dottie" Walton on March 29, 1942, who outlived him by nearly thirteen years. They had two children, and Dottie died on March 7, 2012; just 22 days away from what would have been the couple's Platinum wedding anniversary.

That's a long piece of copy, but it's necessary. There are two sentences that need fixing.

They have 1942 and who married together, and that's obviously wrong. We need to move the date. In the second sentence, they have a semicolon when a comma would work. Finally, I wouldn't uppercase platinum.

On March 29, 1942, Reese was married to Dorothy "Dottie" Walton, who outlived him by nearly thirteen years. They had two children, and Dottie died on March 7, 2012, just 22 days away from what would have been the couple's platinum wedding anniversary.

Those are two simple fixes for this bio of baseball hall-of-famer Pee Wee Reese.

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• Katie cried

• Growl and pull

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• What Lady and Michael Jackson had in common

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(a book of great stories about the Intimidator)

• Then Junior Said to Jeff...

(the book of great NASCAR stories)

• My best day as a sports writer

• Jeff Gordon's milk toast to Dale Earnhardt

• Wayne Auton: A life in racing