Showing posts with label writing a newspaper headline. Show all posts
Showing posts with label writing a newspaper headline. Show all posts

Saturday, June 18, 2011

A headline needs an edit

THIS HEADLINE is close to being right, but not quite.

Miami Dolphins stress team's prepared for the end of the NFL lockout

It seems like there's something missing.

Perhaps they should have said this:

Miami Dolphins work to be prepared for the end of the NFL lockout

or: Miami Dolphins trying to be prepared for the end of the NFL lockout

By the way, that's a really long headline.

or: Miami Dolphins aim to be ready for end of lockout

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Thursday, June 16, 2011

A dreamy headline

I WAS ABOUT to wake up this morning, but first I had a dream about writing (or, in this case, rewriting) a headline. It wasn't just any headline; it was one we originally wrote probably 22 or 23 years ago.

Some university (I won't say which, but its mascot is the Gamecocks) had just fired its offensive coordinator, and we had written a generic headline "So-and-so fires offensive coordinator."

A few minutes later, an editor from news side came roaring over and said it was a company policy; we couldn't run an "offensive" headline. I told her that the headline wasn't offensive; if the coordinator had been more offensive, he'd still have a job.

She wasn't amused. We rewrote the headline to something like "So-and-so fires assistant coach," and that was that.

Then this morning I thought of "So-and-so sacks assistant coach." Sacks is a perfect verb here, since defensive people like to sack quarterbacks. And this guy certainly got sacked.

But why would I dream about it? It's not that great a headline.

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