Showing posts with label writing positively. Show all posts
Showing posts with label writing positively. Show all posts

Friday, May 12, 2017

Was handed a card

FOUND IN A NOVEL: Before Markham could reply he was handed a card by the head-waiter.

I prefer a positive way of writing it.

Before Markham could reply, the head-waiter handed him a card.

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Thursday, September 29, 2016

He was convinced

FOUND ONLINE: Last spring, he was convinced to take it easy by Houston team doctors.
I've read a lot of this guy's writing, and I've mentioned him here before. I like a more positive way of writing.
So: Last spring, Houston team doctors convinced him to take it easy.

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ENTRIES FROM THE DOG BLOG

BLOG ENTRIES FROM THE AUTO RACING JOURNAL
(a book of great stories about the Intimidator)
(the book of great NASCAR stories)