Saturday, January 10, 2015

Tucked in a hillside

Found in a novel: Tucked in a hillside in Portugee Gulch, I was impressed by the size of the place.

It sounds like the book's narrator was tucked in the hillside. Let's try again:

I was impressed by the size of the place, which was tucked in a hillside in Portugee Gulch.

I added "which was" and lengthened the sentence, but it makes more sense this way.

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