Saturday, January 11, 2025

THE LONG GAME

FIRST SENTENCE IN A NOVEL: This all began innocently, although I have been around long enough to be suspicious of what seems to be an innocuous telephone call like the one I received on a sunny June morning as I sat in the office with coffee after breakfast.

I've enjoyed this guy's novels, but this wasn't the way to start a book. It's TOO DAMN LONG! There are at least 43 words in that sentence.

He could have rewritten this into two or three sentences.

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