Showing posts with label stacked modifiers. Show all posts
Showing posts with label stacked modifiers. Show all posts

Thursday, June 6, 2019

I hate stacked modifiers

FOUND ONLINE: Fon Du Lac, Wis.-based hotshot owner-operator Greg Cutler says he can run his gas-fueled 2010 Dodge Ram 2500 at 85 cents per mile, much less than what the average Class 8 operator will spend.

 I hate a stacked modifier. I'd move the name to the front and add commas.

Greg Cutler, a Fon Du Lac, Wis.-based hotshot owner-operator, says he can run his gas-fueled 2010 Dodge Ram 2500 at 85 cents per mile, much less than what the average Class 8 operator will spend.

 Just so you know, I was looking up the term hotshot trucking.

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Sunday, September 18, 2011

A horrible stacked modifier

I've said it before, and I'll say it again: I hate stacked modifiers. Take this:

They have one more against the Angels on Sunday and then try to ruin the baseball lives of the American League wild-card-leading Boston Red Sox next week at Fenway Park. 

"American League wild-card-leading Boston Red Sox" is way too long. This is better:

They play the Angels again on Sunday and then next week at Boston will try to ruin the baseball lives of the Red Sox, leading the wild-card chase in the American League.

It's about the same length, and it gets rid of the huge stack.
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