Sunday, May 20, 2018

Time for you and I

FOUND ONLINE: While it's likely that Waymo will be the first company to make driverless cars a commercial reality, thanks to its Phoenix-based autonomous transportation service that launches soon, when it comes time for you and I to actually buy an autonomous car, there's a very strong chance it'll run technology created by Mobileye.

Maybe it's just me, but you and I seems wrong here. Would you say, When it comes time for I to actually buy...? You and me might work better. I would change you and I to someone, just to feel comfortable.

Also, that sentence is way, way too long (52 words).

As always, what do you think?

FROM THE SAME ARTICLE: Interestingly, that level of aggression can be adjusted, and Shalev-Shwartz envisions a time where his company's car will actually tune its own behavior to suit the level of aggression of those around it. Useful, perhaps, for those commuting from the Boston 'burbs up to southern New Hampshire on the regular.

I'd change a time where to a time when.


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Thursday, May 10, 2018

Primitive deeps

FOUND IN A NOVEL: I shall never forget, in that moment, how instantly conscious I became of my manhood.  The primitive deeps of my nature stirred.

This is from one of my favorite novels, The Sea Wolf, by Jack London. I wonder if London meant primitive depths rather than deeps.

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Tuesday, May 8, 2018

Friends say Cohen

FOUND ONLINE: Besieged by the media and legal bills, and feeling abandoned by Washington, friends say Cohen is in a “dangerous place.”

It sounds like Michael Cohen's friends are beseiged by the media. Let's try again:

Michael Cohen's friends say he's in a "dangerous place," as he's besieged by the media and legal bills, and feeling abandoned by Washington.

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