Tuesday, November 7, 2017

Leaps and forced

FOUND ONLINE: Miami was down just 20-16 near the start of the fourth quarter as Suh leaps toward Derek Carr and forced a fumble with a chop while in mid-air.

This seems odd to me. The writer starts out in past tense (was down), goes to present tense (Suh leaps) and then goes back to past tense (and forced). I know that leapt or leaped might seem awkward, but I'd stay in past tense.

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Saturday, October 7, 2017

With whom else

HEARD ON YOUTUBE: And with whom else is its author willing to meet?

The speaker had with and whom together and thought he was right. No. Whom else doesn't make sense here.

And with who else is its author willing to meet?

QUOTE FOUND ONLINE: "These guys have worked really hard, and they ought to have today and tomorrow, at least, to just enjoy what they've done, and then Monday we'll assess whomever we play next."


Yes, it should be whoever we play next.

FOUND ONLINE: The coaching staff is still in the early stages of rebuilding the program, Mendenhall emphasized, but he sees steadily improvement and likes "the mindset on the sideline as I'm watching our players' body language," he said.

I'd change steadily to steady, and I'd break up that long sentence.

The coaching staff is still in the early stages of rebuilding the program, Mendenhall emphasized. Still, he sees steady improvement and says he likes "the mindset on the sideline as I'm watching our players' body language."

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