Their nose

FOUND ONLINE: Surprisingly because they get fluids accumulating in their nose astronauts say their sense of smell is weakened, and as a direct result, food tastes bland.

I would think that it's their noses, not their nose.

Is there anything that bothers you about this sentence? I might put a period after weakened and end it this way: As a result, food tastes bland. I'm not sure that direct is necessary. And I like shorter sentences.

Later in the article, there's another sentence that bothers me:

"... they will have a greater risk of bone fractures for the rest of their life."

Again, I would make it their lives, not their life.

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Whomever is under center

FOUND ONLINE: The third Aggie in a row to come off the board, the Vikings look to pair the big receiver with their No. 1 pick (well, one of them) from 2013, Cordarelle Patterson, to create a dynamic duo for whomever is under center when the 2014 season starts.

This needs some help. The first part of the sentence doesn't mention a person (Mike Evans, in this case), and it's whoever not whomever.

With Evans becoming the third Aggie in a row to come off the board, the Vikings look to pair the big receiver with their No. 1 pick (well, one of them) from 2013, Cordarelle Patterson, to create a dynamic duo for whoever is under center when the 2014 season starts.

ALSO FOUND ONLINE: According to CBSSports.com, "some Dolphins coaches aren't fans" of wide receiver Mike Wallace, whom was signed to a massive $60 million dollar contract in 2013.

Whom should be who here, and you don't need to say that a $60-million-dollar contract is massive. Readers can tell.

According to CBSSports.com, "some Dolphins coaches aren't fans" of wide receiver Mike Wallace, who was signed to a $60-million-dollar contract in 2013.

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• An editor's views on powerful writing

• Advice for be and would-be novelists

• Links to TG's stories online

• Favorite quotes

• What I do when I'm editing

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• Growl and pull

• ... said the spider to ...

• The Dog Diary (2015)

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• Then Junior Said to Jeff...

(the book of great NASCAR stories)

• My best day as a sports writer

• Jeff Gordon's milk toast to Dale Earnhardt

• Wayne Auton: A life in racing