Saturday, July 31, 2010

Brothers is

FOUND IN A WIRE STORY: Igdalsky, and his brother Nick, is easing Pocono into an always-evolving modern day sports world.

I realize that the writer is thinking just of Igdalsky, but I'd have to use are instead of is. The two brothers make it plural.

FROM ANOTHER WIRE STORY: Hull played a flawless third round, including give straight birdies, to finish with a 66.

I'd think that was five, not give.

INTERNET LIBRARY: There are many libraries online, and I just found the Internet Public Library. Check it out.


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Wednesday, July 28, 2010

Over the course

THIS IS WORDY AND REDUNDANT: Why redundant? You have back-to-back sentences with "over the course" in them.

The more telling number, however, is the 15.1 yards per catch Owens averaged over the course of the season. That's right in line with where he has been over the course of his career and should be the first statistic mentioned by any Owens supporter hoping to dispel the notion that he has lost a step.

Let's try again:

The more telling number, however, is the 15.1 yards per catch Owens averaged last season. That's in line with where he has been over the course of his career and should dispel the notion that he has lost a step.

HERE'S ANOTHER: When I’m not covering the Miami Dolphins, or spending time with my family, I’m submerged in hip-hop music, and it’s culture.

The first part of that sentence is fine. The last part of that can be changed to I'm submerged in hip-hop music and its culture.

But hip-hop music isn't what I'd call culture.


Contact: Reach me at tgilli52@gmail.com or nc3022@yahoo.com.

(a book of great stories about the Intimidator)
(the book of great NASCAR stories)

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Anecdotes by Tom Gillispie