Thursday, January 25, 2018

Raj Shah, said

FOUND ONLINE: "The Graham-Durbin proposal is not a proposal the president can sign," the White House deputy press secretary, Raj Shah, said.

I think this attribution is backwards.

"The Graham-Durbin proposal is not a proposal the president can sign," said Raj Shah, the White House deputy press secretary.

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Tuesday, January 23, 2018

Lead the National League

FOUND ONLINE: He was great in the leadoff spot mainly due to his speed, evidenced by the fact he lead the National League in stolen bases in six consecutive seasons.

This is the wrong kind of lead (this would be like lead paint). And the sentence is wordy.


He was great in the leadoff spot mainly because of his speed, as he led the National League in stolen bases in six consecutive seasons.

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FROM THE SAME ARTICLE: While he helped the Twins to the 1991 World Series title while batting second, he batted leadoff on a New York Yankees teams that three-peated from 1998-2000

It's fairly obvious that the writer was changing a New York Yankee team to New York Yankees teams (because of the three-peat). So you don't need a.

MORE FROM THE ARTICLE: He was the type of player who would do whatever he had to do too help his team win.

This writer didn't proofread his article very well (or at all).

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