Saturday, October 7, 2017

With whom else

HEARD ON YOUTUBE: And with whom else is its author willing to meet?

The speaker had with and whom together and thought he was right. No. Whom else doesn't make sense here.

And with who else is its author willing to meet?


FOUND ONLINE: The coaching staff is still in the early stages of rebuilding the program, Mendenhall emphasized, but he sees steadily improvement and likes "the mindset on the sideline as I'm watching our players' body language," he said.

I'd change steadily to steady, and I'd break up that long sentence.

The coaching staff is still in the early stages of rebuilding the program, Mendenhall emphasized. Still, he sees steady improvement and says he likes "the mindset on the sideline as I'm watching our players' body language."

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Friday, October 6, 2017

Man (right) walks with his wife

CAPTION FOUND ONLINE: Tom Burns (right) and wife Robin

I know all about the longstanding tradition of pointing out who is who in photos. Still, I'm going to knit pick here.

It's pretty obvious that Tom Burns is on our right and wife Robin is on the left. The web site's style is to beat the reader over the head with that info, but it's not necessary.

I was working at a newspaper years ago and ran a photo of a famous racehorse being walked by a groom. According to the newspaper's style, I had to say "Horse (right) is being walked by Somebody." Which is silly.


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Blog entries from The Auto Racing Journal
(a book of great stories about the Intimidator)
(the book of great NASCAR stories)

More blog entries by Tom Gillispie