Monday, September 21, 2015

Travel the world in

Found online: Meet John. He’s a 75-year-old man who built this awesome tiny house truck for he and his wife to travel the world in.


I don't like the use of he and his wife in this instance, and I don't like ending the sentence with in. So I'd change the last part of the sentence to "so he and his wife can travel the world."

It's not as awkward.

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Tuesday, September 15, 2015

Three TDs paces

Headline from Football Weekly: GRONK's THREE TDs PACES PATRIOTS IN OPENER

That's the drop head on the front page. The top headline was HOW'S THAT FOR STARTERS!

The problem I have is THREE TDs PACES. I would change the headline to GRONK'S THREE TDs PACE PATRIOTS IN OPENER.

Also the drop head is blue with silver trim. It fits the Patriots' color scheme, but it's hard to see overtop that photo of Gronkowski.

Links: On my web siteI have links to some of my stories online.

Editorial group: If you're a writer, editor or general freelancer, you might check out my Freelance Writers and Editors group on Yahoo!

Writers' guidelines: If you want to write for magazines (or book publishers), check out the writers' guidelines on my Freelance Writers and Editors group on Yahoo!

Followers: Welcome to all the followers on this blog. May the Force be with you.

Check it out: You might look at Funds for Writers, which specializes in grants for writers.

Contact:
 You can reach me at tgilli52@gmail.com or nc3022@yahoo.comAlso, my Twitter handle is EDITORatWORK.


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Blog entries from The Auto Racing Journal
(a book of great stories about the Intimidator)

(the book of great NASCAR stories)

More blog entries by Tom Gillispie