Peyton Manning remains with the Colts after signing a reported five-year, $90 million contract to remain with the team he was drafted by in 1998.
Let's change it this way:
Peyton Manning signed a reported five-year, $90 million contract and will remain with the Colts, the team that drafted him in 1998.
You're still putting a lot of information in one sentence, but at least it's cleaner.
More EDITOR@WORK blog entries
Blog entries from The Auto Racing Journal
(a book of great stories about the Intimidator)
(the book of great NASCAR stories)
More blog entries by Tom Gillispie
Anecdotes by Tom Gillispie