Monday, December 31, 2018

That that their

FOUND ONLINE: It doesn't help that that their are holes throughout the roster...

I'd lose one of the thats and change their to there. If you're wondering, this is the first half of a compound-complex sentence.

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Sunday, December 23, 2018

Lost by a 17-7 score

FOUND ONLINE: Gase’s offense only scoring seven points in Miami’s 17-7 loss to the Jacksonville Jaguars cost his team the game.


If the Dolphins lost by a 17-7 score, then the offense couldn't have scored more than seven points, by definition. Instead, I would have written this:
The offense's poor performance in Miami’s 17-7 loss to the Jacksonville Jaguars cost the team the game.

You might as well get right to the point.

CHRISTMAS/POLITICAL STORY FOUND ONLINE: Watch the video, followed by Trimp’s tweet:

I think the writer meant Trump, not Trimp.

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