Sunday, June 28, 2015

Her husband Tom's suggestion

Found in a novel: Once that was done, it had been her husband's Tom's, suggestion that they look deeper into her Klingon past...


That's a portion of a sentence I found in a novel. Here's a better way to write it:


Once that was done, her husband Tom suggested that they look deeper into her Klingon past...

It's a shorter (three fewer words) and neater way of saying the same thing.

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