Tuesday, December 13, 2011

A better way to say it...

Needs editing: “I got in the game and I wanted to prove I belong here,” said the 6-foot-1, 213-pound Royster, who on Washington’s final drive received two carries and picked up 14 yards on the first and six yards on the second.

That dependent clause at the end could use help:

... Royster, who had carries for 14 and six yards on Washington’s final drive.

Another CSI: The Crime Scene Investigation (CSI) TV shows are popular (I like them, too). I just found another CSI ... the College of Southern Idaho. CSI sounded familiar for some reason.

More later.

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