That's a portion of a sentence I found in a novel. Here's a better way to write it:
Once that was done, her husband Tom suggested that they look deeper into her Klingon past...
It's a shorter (three fewer words) and neater way of saying the same thing.
Links: On my web site, I have links to some of my stories online.
Editorial group: If you're a writer, editor or general freelancer, you might check out my Freelance Writers and Editors group on Yahoo!
Writers' guidelines: If you want to write for magazines (or book publishers), check out the writers' guidelines on my Freelance Writers and Editors group on Yahoo!
Check it out: You might look at Funds for Writers, which specializes in grants for writers.
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