Spring onions is

FOUND ONLINE: Spring onions is normally used in cuisines, as it enhances the taste of a dish.

Maybe it's me, but I see an edit needed here.

Spring onions are normally used in cuisines, as they enhance the taste of a dish.

FROM A SPORTS STORY: When it comes to reliability there is very few NFL players as consistently good as Landry.

This is a similar problem. Also, you don't need very. There ARE few NFL players...

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Coldly announced

FOUND ONLINE: “The President and First Lady have decided not to participate in this year’s activities to allow the honorees to celebrate without any political distraction,” coldly announced the White House early in the AM today regarding the 40th Honors. “First Lady Melania Trump, along with her husband President Donald J. Trump, extend their sincerest congratulations and well wishes to all of this year’s award recipients for their many accomplishments,” the fleeing statement added.

I would say that the White House coldly announced, rather than the way they did it. Also, I wonder if the writer meant fleeting rather than fleeing. And if I could edit a direct statement, I'd say First Lady Melania Trump and President Donald J. Trump... We already know that the first lady is married to the president.

“The President and First Lady have decided not to participate in this year’s activities to allow the honorees to celebrate without any political distraction,” the White House coldly announced early in the AM today regarding the 40th Honors. “First Lady Melania Trump, along with her husband President Donald J. Trump, extend their sincerest congratulations and well wishes to all of this year’s award recipients for their many accomplishments,” the fleeting statement added.

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• ... said the spider to ...

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(a book of great stories about the Intimidator)

• Then Junior Said to Jeff...

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• My best day as a sports writer

• Jeff Gordon's milk toast to Dale Earnhardt

• Wayne Auton: A life in racing

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• An editor's views on powerful writing

• Advice for be and would-be novelists

• Links to TG's stories online

• Favorite quotes

• What I do when I'm editing

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• Good Samaritan

• The PRESS cap and my friend Mike

• Watching TV

• No luck with Billy Sims

• Wipeout at Death Valley

• Days with rainbows

• A desperate writer working in the dark

• Yer outta there!