Showing posts with label editing sports. Show all posts
Showing posts with label editing sports. Show all posts

Saturday, November 9, 2024

ONLY UNANIMOUS

FOUND ONLINE: He was the only unanimous All-American selection in 1924, making him the first player in college football history to receive that honor.

This is from Red Grange's Wikipedia page, and this can be tighter.

In 1924, Grange became the first unanimous All-America selection.

Period.

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Wednesday, October 30, 2024

STELLAR CAREER

FOUND ONLINE: After a stellar collegiate career at Fresno State and earning Senior Bowl MVP Honors, the Saints traded up in the fourth round to select Jake Haener in 2023.

No, the Saints didn't have a great career at Fresno State. Let's correct this:

After Jake Haener's stellar collegiate career at Fresno State, the Saints traded up to select him in the fourth round in 2023.

I had to cut out the Senior Bowl stuff to make it work.

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ENTRIES FROM THE DOG BLOG

BLOG ENTRIES FROM THE AUTO RACING JOURNAL
(a book of great stories about the Intimidator)
(the book of great NASCAR stories)