Wednesday, October 6, 2021

LESS THAN THE MALE

FOUND ONLINE: The male greyhound typically stands between 26 and 30 inches tall and weighs 65 to 70 pounds. The female weighs about 60 to 65 pounds less than the male.

The female weighs about 60 to 65 pounds less than the male. That means the female greyhound weighs about five pounds.

You probably can fix this sentence with a comma, or just take out "less than the male" altogether. The female weighs about 60 to 65 pounds, less than the male. Or: The female weighs about 60 to 65 pounds.

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