Showing posts with label newspaper writing. Show all posts
Showing posts with label newspaper writing. Show all posts

Friday, February 18, 2022

LARGEST AMOUNT

FOUND ONLINE: That is worse than the toll in Mississippi, the U.S. state with the largest amount of Covid death per capita, and worse than in any country except for Peru.

There is a simple way to fix this.

That is worse than the toll in Mississippi, the U.S. state with the most Covid deaths per capita, and worse than in any country except for Peru.

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Thursday, December 2, 2021

I GOT LOST IN THIS SENTENCE

FOUND ON WAPO: Nevermind that the line he generates uses data from the state itself, which, as I analogized previously, is like trying to predict how fast Usain Bolt ran in a number of past races by averaging a number of past Usain Bolt race results.

ANALOGIZEDTo make an analogy of or concerning: analogize the human brain to a computer. OR: To reason by or use analogy.

Never mind is two words. I won't try to edit the sentence; I got lost in the middle. I WOULD change a number of to several

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ENTRIES FROM THE DOG BLOG

BLOG ENTRIES FROM THE AUTO RACING JOURNAL
(a book of great stories about the Intimidator)
(the book of great NASCAR stories)