Sunday, November 3, 2013

Sixth in a row and 15th time

Found online: Virginia (2-7, 0-5) lost its sixth in a row and for the 15th time in its last 19 games.

The problem here is that "its sixth in a row" and "15th time in its last 19 games" don't go together; it's not parallel construction. Let's try again:

Virginia (2-7, 0-5) suffered its sixth straight loss and its 15th in its last 19 games.

Also found online: Tennessee (4-5, 1-4) is 0-4 on the road, all but one of them blowouts.

I'd rewrite the last part of that sentence.

Tennessee (4-5, 1-4) is 0-4 on the road, including three blowouts.

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