Showing posts with label a good editor. Show all posts
Showing posts with label a good editor. Show all posts

Friday, January 24, 2014

They get all the credit

FOUND ONLINE: But just as they get all the credit when things are going well, the quarterback is also the player who receives the most blame when the wheels fall off. 

A quarterback isn't a they; let's try again.


But just as they get all the credit when things are going well, quarterbacks also receive the most blame when the wheels fall off. 

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Wednesday, January 22, 2014

Extremely slowly

Found in a book: The long column moved with utmost silence and extremely slowly.

I hate "extremely slowly," two more back-to-back "ly" words. Besides, this isn't parallel construction.

Let's try again: The long column crept along in extreme quiet.

Or: The long column proceeded slowly and quietly.

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ENTRIES FROM THE DOG BLOG

BLOG ENTRIES FROM THE AUTO RACING JOURNAL
(a book of great stories about the Intimidator)
(the book of great NASCAR stories)