Showing posts with label overwriting. Show all posts
Showing posts with label overwriting. Show all posts

Friday, September 15, 2023

BURIES THOUSANDS

HEADLINE FOUND ONLINE: Libya buries thousands after deadly floods that killed at least 5,100

I'd rewrite this:

At least 5,100 dead after flooding in Libya

You don't need to say deadly floods. That's obviously redundant.

FOUND ONLINE: RUDY GIULIANI SPIRILING OUT OF CONTROL.

It's SPIRALING.

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Sunday, June 26, 2022

LONDON BOROUGH IN NORTH LONDON

FOUND ONLINE: The London Borough of Enfield is a London borough in North London.

The writer hammered home the fact that Enfield is a London borough.

My edit: Enfield is a borough in North London.

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ENTRIES FROM THE DOG BLOG

BLOG ENTRIES FROM THE AUTO RACING JOURNAL
(a book of great stories about the Intimidator)
(the book of great NASCAR stories)