Thursday, March 31, 2011

Don't SHOUT

When I worked at newspapers, I never liked it when I received press releases that WERE IN ALL-CAPITALS. WHO WANTS SOMEONE SHOUTING AT YOU AT THE TOP OF THEIR LUNGS?

The other problem with Capitalization is that writers capitalize words indiscriminately. I recently saw that a guy taught Composition in high school. That's great, but why does a subject need to be capitalized? I took journalism in college and never felt the need to say that I took Journalism.

I recently was Proofreading a non-fiction Book, and I found hundreds of Words that were capitalized incorrectly or indiscriminately. Yes, you would uppercase General as in General Norman Schwarzkopf; otherwise, it's Norman Schwarzkopf, a former general.

But the ubiquitous uppercasing of words doesn't bother me as much as poor grammar. I just found "You've probably heard Wilson and I talk ..." online, and, frankly, "Wilson and I" just doesn't cut it. Would you say "You've probably heard I talk about this or that?" No, you'd say "You've probably heard me talk..."

Same with further and farther. Farther is distance -- you ran farther than I did today. Further has more of a time element -- after further review, for instance.

Then there's "between you and I." Two men of letters were arguing in the 1993 remake of the movie "The Sea Wolf." The late Christopher Reeve was playing protagonist Humphrey van Weyden, and the other man was ready to fight a duel. The man said "between you and I," and that fueled van Weyden's final volley. He said something like, "For my weapon, I choose words, and, between you and me, you're out of ammunition."

It was great to hear a snooty guy on a bad version of a classic novel using language correctly. It's a never-ending battle, though. As Rosana-Rosana Dana said so eloquently, "It's always something."


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Monday, March 28, 2011

Bad headines

A friend emailed me some bad headlines, and I thought I'd pass a few along.

I'm just glad I didn't write any of them.

Man Kills Self Before Shooting Wife and Daughter

The editor had to re-read it two or three times before he realized that a man couldn't kill himself, then shoot someone else. The correction went in the paper the next day.

Something Went Wrong in Jet Crash, Expert Says

Well, duh!

Panda Mating Fails; Veterinarian Takes Over

I wonder what the female panda thought of that.

Juvenile Court to Try Shooting Defendant

When all else fails, shoot them.

If Strike Isn't Settled Quickly, It May Last Awhile

What was the headline writer thinking? If anything.

Enfield (London) Couple Slain; Police Suspect Homicide

Homicide follows when someone is slain. Otherwise, you're stuck with natural causes or suicide.

Red Tape Holds Up New Bridges

Do they make red duct tape?

Astronaut Takes Blame for Gas in Spacecraft

Sorry... Those beans will get you every time.

Local High School Dropouts Cut in Half

I can imagine a magician pulling out his saw.

Hospitals Are Sued by 7 Foot Doctors

Apparently foot doctors are getting taller these days.


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Saturday, March 26, 2011

Dying

THIS IS A QUOTE by a songwriter, but I think it works for most writers:

"When I am not writing, I'm dying." - Neil Diamond

Friday, March 25, 2011

Perigee

LOTS OF PEOPLE apparently have been looking up the word perigee on Merriam-Webster's web site because of the so-called supermoon.

In school, I always remembered apogee (the moon's greatest distance from earth) because of the word apology. Thus, I knew that perigee was the moon's closest distance to earth.

Success

HERE'S A FAMOUS quote on success by Ralph Waldo Emerson:

“To laugh often and much; to win the respect of intelligent people and the affection of children...to leave the world a better place...to know even one life has breathed easier because you have lived. This is to have succeeded.”

It's always been one of my favorites.

Thursday, March 24, 2011

More safe

I wondered when I read this sentence online just now:

In an effort to make the game more safe, the N.F.L. broke with recent tradition by voting for a rule change that is likely to lead to less scoring.

Do you need to say more safe? Or will safer suffice?

Wednesday, March 23, 2011

Bad writing

I ENJOY GOOD WRITING, of course, but sometimes The Best in Terrible Writing is good, too. Check it out.

Tuesday, March 22, 2011

The right word

HERE'S A FAVORITE bit of writing (and editing) advice from Mark Twain:

"The difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between lightning and a lightning bug."

Monday, March 21, 2011

Awkward sentence

Let's rewrite this awkward sentence just found online:

Williams said he has no magic cure to ensure another slow start by Carolina won't happen tonight.

Let's try again:

Williams said he can't ensure that Carolina won't start slow again tonight.

More later.

Who and that

It's aggravating when a writer says "that" when he means who.

She was the one who lent me her car. That's correct. ("She lent me the car" would have been a better way to say it, though.)

He's the pilot that flew us to Phoenix. That's incorrect. (Yes, "He flew us to Phoenix" would have worked nicely.)

Aren’t you the one that wanted to ride with us? No. Sorry. (Who wanted to ride with us? You did.)

Cauliflower is a vegetable that I eat all the time. Yep. That is correct. At least the grammar is correct. I don't eat cauliflower often.

That's the kind of woman that turns me on. Thanks for playing, but no. She's still a who. She's the kind of woman who turns me on.

It's pretty simple. A person is a "who," whether you're giving a name or talking about a teacher, a linebacker, a taxi driver or a tax preparer. It's "that" when you're not talking about a person.

There is a gray area, though. I consider my dog Lady a "who." I thought of Secretariat as a "who." Same with Data, the android in Star Trek: The Next Generation. They proved in "Measure of a Man" that Data had rights, so he's a who. And, besides, I'm generous.

But, I'm also an editor, and I'm sorry ... a boat, whether it's the Lady Luck or the Queen Mary, is not a who.

Who's next?

Saturday, March 19, 2011

Wisp of stream

Sometimes editing is subtle. Same with reading.

I was just reading a Robert B. Parker novel, Night and Day, and I came across this sentence.

She held her coffee cup in both hands in front of her mouth, watching the faint wisp of stream rise from it.

Something seemed wrong, and I had to read the sentence twice before I realized that Parker probably meant steam, not stream. You can't catch everything, even though you try.


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Friday, March 18, 2011

This and that

WORD SITE: If you get the chance, check out Coolestwords.com.

THE SECRET OF WRITING: "Have something to say, and say it as clearly as you can. That is the only secret." - Matthew Arnold

SWIRL OF WORDS: I've mentioned a few times here that I love the swirl of words, the fine way that writers put ink to paper (or fingers to keyboard).

I enjoy a sentence from Nicholas Evans' The Horse Whisperer:
"It rained for eight days without taking a breath."
I realize that it's probably a mixed metaphor, but I like it.

TODAY'S WORD: Pneumonoultramicroscopicsilicovolcanoconiosis is the longest word in the Oxford English Dictionary. It's a lung disease caused by the inhalation of fine silica dust.

TODAY IN HISTORY: On March 18, 1852 in New York City, Henry Wells and William G. Fargo join with several other investors to launch their namesake business.

GREETINGS: Welcome to the followers of this blog. I hope this is worth your time.

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Thursday, March 17, 2011

They do care

I ALWAYS WONDERED if newspaper readers care about mistakes and amateurish writing, two things that solid copy editing can cure. Apparently they do.

According to a study by a professor, Fred Vultee, "real people" can tell when the writing is poor and full of errors. His findings were announced during a session at a conference held by the American Copy Editors Society (ACES; I'm a member).

“If you think something is sloppy or amateurish, there’s a good chance (readers) do, too,” said Fred Vultee, an assistant professor at Wayne State University, who spoke at a session during the society’s 15th national conference.

Speaking of copy editing, I think the above sentence/paragraph tries to offer too much information. I might have made a second sentence saying this, Vultee spoke at a session during the society's 15th national conference.

 My wife Holly and I worked with Vultee at the Wilmington (N.C.) Star-News in the 1980s. Fred was a terrific copy editor, and apparently he's a pretty good professor, too.

Tuesday, March 15, 2011

Squashed?

I think they used the wrong word in this sentence:

The lockout might have squashed any hope they have to receive financing for a new stadium in 2011.

I think they were looking for quashed, not squashed.

I even remember when I first heard the word quashed. A columnist used it, and we immediately went to the dictionary. He was so proud.

I just found another misused word:

The numbers are usually in your favor that at some point there will eventually be parody and you will find yourself at least in some sort of contention.

I think they meant parity, not parody.

I have to admit, though, that the NFL's current lockout is a parody of good sports business.

Saturday, March 12, 2011

Writor?

I just found an online job ad for a "creative writor."

Ouch. It was painful for me to spell "writer" that way.

Oh, no. I just found another ad offering a "Writting job."

It must be an epidemic.

Friday, March 11, 2011

The detail

I was reading a novella by one of my favorite authors yesterday, and one detail kept bothering me. The soon-to-be murdered man was an opera singer, and someone punched him and broke his larynx. The problem is that the writer kept saying that the man hit him in the neck and damaged his larynx.

Why is that a problem? To be precise, he didn't punch him in the neck; he punched him in the throat.

Tuesday, March 8, 2011

Getting help

HERE ARE A FEW online sites that will help writers and editors:

Net Info Base
http://www.netinfobase.com/default.asp?cmd=dict

Dictionary.com
 http://dictionary.reference.com/

Merriam-Webster
http://www.merriam-webster.com/

YourDictionary.com
http://www.yourdictionary.com/

Webster's Online Dictionary
http://www.websters-online-dictionary.org/

OneLook Dictionary Search
 http://www.onelook.com/

WordCentral
http://www.wordcentral.com/

alphaDictionary
http://www.alphadictionary.com/index.shtml

DICT.org
http://www.dict.org/bin/Dict

You might also try:

Acronyms and Abbreviations. Also search by keywords to find the perfect or correct abbreviation for a word or phrase.
http://www.ucc.ie/info/net/acronyms/

Acronyms and Abbreviations.
http://www.acronymfinder.com

Bartleby Quotations
http://www.bartleby.com/100/

The Clichés site
http://www.westegg.com/cliche/

Encarta
http://encarta.msn.com/

The Free Dictionary
http://www.thefreedictionary.com/

Merriam-Webster Dictionary
http://www.m-w.com/info/favorite.htm


Newseum "Interactive museum of news" contains everything from front-page news from around the world to Pulitzer prize-winning photographs and editorial cartoons.
http://www.newseum.org/

Quotations Page
 http://www.quotationspage.com

Reference site
http://dictionary.reference.com/

Rhyming Dictionary
 http://www.rhymer.com

A reader suggested this one:
http://fishcodelib.com/Dictionary.htm
If you know of more sites, I'd like to hear from you.

Sunday, March 6, 2011

Irony

IF YOU'RE A FAN of irony, as I am, check out this web site. It might be worth your time.

I have to admit, though, that the ones involving proofreading, editing and bad spelling hit too close to home.

HERE'S A WEB SITE featuring photos from the 1800s. It was cool to see shots from that era, and some of them are pretty good.


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Saturday, March 5, 2011

Allegedly

I HATE THE USE of the word allegedly in a news story. Sure, the newspaper, magazine or web site (or whatever) wants to avoid litigation, but sometimes the word alleged isn't necessary. If someone got punched out, do you need to say they allegedly got punched out? Or someone allegedly fled the scene?

I agree that sometimes it's necessary; often, though, it isn't.

I like it

I JUST FOUND a newspaper headline that I like. The story is about a newspaper obituary writer stepping into a stage coffin for a role in "Play Dead," an off-Broadway show. The headline:

An Obit Writer's Chance to Think Inside the Box

Friday, March 4, 2011

Writing help

I just found a web site on About.com that offers advice about Confounding Compounds, and it would be worth your time.

Is alright OK? No. It's all right.

How about alot? No. It's a lot.

Altogether or all together? Both.

Every day or everyday? Both. The last two depend on how they're used.

Check it out.

Thursday, March 3, 2011

Follow up

SOMEONE HAD AN interesting question today on my freelance network. She wanted to know if it's follow-up or follow up. I said that I'd follow up a lead, but I'd have a follow-up question.

Anyone else have an opinion?

My dad's day

LAST NIGHT, I LOOKED at the calendar and realized that today is my dad's birthday. He died March 13, 2003, and he would have been 94 today if he had lived.

I have some wonderful memories, of course. When I was 12, probably the summer of 1965, they held a fair in the Shenandoah Valley of Virginia, and we went. We rode the ferris wheel, and I remember my dad clenching his teeth when they stopped us at the top and rocked our seat back and forth. We met some TV "celebrities" from a station in West Virginia, and I saw my first camel. Huge and smelly.

We didn't see it, but some guy I didn't know tried to wrestle a 165-pound gorilla. Within seconds, the gorilla pulled the guy's pants down, and the fair operators turned off the lights. It's a funny memory, but it's hear-say.

I remember us throwing the baseball just one time. Every time I watch "Field of Dreams," I have the same regrets. And no matter how I wish, I can't get him back for a game of pitch.

My dad had a wonderful singing voice, but it was hard to sing beside him in church. He drowned everyone out within two or three rows in each direction. Certainly, no one could have heard me.

Oddly, one of my favorite days with him came when I drove him to the nursing home in 1996 (his idea). I had a hard time getting him to fasten his seat belt in the first place; then I stopped to get gas, and it felt like an earthquake! My dark-red Nissan pickup was rocking back and forth while I was standing behind it, and I finally realized that he was trying to get out of the belt! I went around and let him out -- he probably wanted to go into the store to buy a pack of Nabs -- and I was happy he didn't use his knife to cut his way out.

We also sang one of his favorite songs, the Wabash Cannonball, that day. He had a wonderful voice and would sing anywhere, any time. We sang the same song together in 2003, a few days before he died.

There are other stories, of course, but I'll save them for another time.

Happy birthday, Dad.