Strokes and periods

FOUND ONLINE: Even as late as 1900, before the advent of antibiotics, Americans “could primarily expect to die from pneumonia, influenza, tuberculosis, gastrointestinal infections, heart disease and cerebrovascular disease (strokes.)”

The only problem I see here is the period. I'd move it between the parenthesis and the quote mark. The period goes for the whole sentence not just (strokes).

Even as late as 1900, before the advent of antibiotics, Americans “could primarily expect to die from pneumonia, influenza, tuberculosis, gastrointestinal infections, heart disease and cerebrovascular disease (strokes).”

FROM THE SAME ARTICLE: He couldn’t take either and nearly died of suffocation while attempting to using them.

I'd change using to use.

He couldn’t take either and nearly died of suffocation while attempting to use them.

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