FOUND ONLINE: That sets a new YouTube record.
It can't set an OLD YouTube record, so you don't need new.
Re-do: That sets a YouTube record.
ALSO FOUND ONLINE: Extremely undersized for the position – Murray shorter than Russell Wilson and lean frame in the vain of smaller, athletic quarterbacks who have populated the league in recent decades, such as Michael Vick, Seneca Wallace, Pat White and others.
I think they meant vein, not vain. And you don't need it. Also, that sentence is long and hard to read.
Re-do: Extremely undersized for quarterback – Murray is shorter than Russell Wilson and has a lean frame like Michael Vick, Seneca Wallace, Pat White and other recent smaller, athletic quarterbacks.
It can't set an OLD YouTube record, so you don't need new.
Re-do: That sets a YouTube record.
ALSO FOUND ONLINE: Extremely undersized for the position – Murray shorter than Russell Wilson and lean frame in the vain of smaller, athletic quarterbacks who have populated the league in recent decades, such as Michael Vick, Seneca Wallace, Pat White and others.
I think they meant vein, not vain. And you don't need it. Also, that sentence is long and hard to read.
Re-do: Extremely undersized for quarterback – Murray is shorter than Russell Wilson and has a lean frame like Michael Vick, Seneca Wallace, Pat White and other recent smaller, athletic quarterbacks.
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