Showing posts with label editing football stories. Show all posts
Showing posts with label editing football stories. Show all posts

Monday, December 30, 2013

Winning redundantly

FOUND ONLINE: However, with eight seconds left in regulation, the Chiefs were in position to win the game as Ryan Succop lined up to kick a 41-yard game-winning field goal from the San Diego 23.

That sounds redundant to me, especially the win the game with a 41-yard game-winning field goal. Let's try again.

However, with eight seconds left in regulation, the Chiefs were in position to win the game as Ryan Succop lined up to kick a 41-yard field goal from the San Diego 23.

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Thursday, May 30, 2013

Whom was a perfect

Found online: Rookie Kicker Greg Zuerlein, whom was a perfect 13-13 from the field, missed three of his five field goals including the game tying attempt.

No, sorry. Let's try it again:


Rookie Greg Zuerleinwho was a perfect 13 for 13 from the field before the game, missed three of his five field-goal attempts, including the game-tying attempt.

That's a lot of work for one sentence.

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