Showing posts with label passive voice. Show all posts
Showing posts with label passive voice. Show all posts

Saturday, August 27, 2022

DEFEATED BY AUNT FANNY

FOUND IN A NOVEL: As a newsman, Qwilleran was an expert at interviewing difficult subjects, but he was defeated by Aunt Fanny.

I might change the last part of that sentence to but Aunt Fanny defeated him. It sounds more straightforward.

FROM THE SAME NOVEL: The desk in Aunt Fanny's sitting room was a graceful French escritoire devoted to correspondence...

An ESCRITOIRE is a writing table or desk; specifically : secretary.

FROM ANOTHER NOVEL: ... left-handed whelk.

WHELK is a sea snail. I don't know how he could tell it was left-handed; they don't have hands.

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Thursday, September 29, 2016

He was convinced

FOUND ONLINE: Last spring, he was convinced to take it easy by Houston team doctors.
I've read a lot of this guy's writing, and I've mentioned him here before. I like a more positive way of writing.
So: Last spring, Houston team doctors convinced him to take it easy.
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Entries from The Dog Blog

Blog entries from The Auto Racing Journal
(a book of great stories about the Intimidator)
(the book of great NASCAR stories)

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