Sunday, November 3, 2013

Sixth in a row and 15th time

Found online: Virginia (2-7, 0-5) lost its sixth in a row and for the 15th time in its last 19 games.

The problem here is that "its sixth in a row" and "15th time in its last 19 games" don't go together; it's not parallel construction. Let's try again:


Virginia (2-7, 0-5) suffered its sixth straight loss and its 15th in its last 19 games.


Also found online: Tennessee (4-5, 1-4) is 0-4 on the road, all but one of them blowouts.

I'd rewrite the last part of that sentence.

Tennessee (4-5, 1-4) is 0-4 on the road, including three blowouts.

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Womens' relationship and peoples' hearts

Found online: The womens' relationship began about nine months ago.

This is from a news story. Women is already plural, so it would be women's relationship, not womens' relationship (which spellcheck hates).

The women's relationship began about nine months ago.

Also online: A writing blog used the phrase "touch peoples’ hearts." This is similar to women's relationship — people and women are both plural — and it should be "touch people's hearts."

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