Wednesday, October 26, 2011

At the track

Found online: Johnson’s car passed inspection after the race at the track.

 Why state the obvious? Where else would the race be?

Johnson’s car passed inspection after the race.

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Small oops

Minor edit: This is part of a sentence from a press release -- ... take over the reigns as crew chief... That ought to be reins, not reigns.

 Another edit: Here's part of a story found online -- ... whom Washington drafted in the sixth-round out of Penn State. You don't need the hyphen unless you say he was a sixth-round draft pick. Otherwise, sixth round will do.

 Bothers me: Here's a sentence just found online -- It's unclear if compensation would be owed to the Pittsburgh Steelers should Cowher took a job with another team.

 I'd change it this way:

 It's unclear if compensation would be owed to the Pittsburgh Steelers if Cowher takes a job with another team.

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