This sentence about the World Series makes me wonder -- The first four Rangers batters of the game reached base against him in 
the first, but Carpenter escaped with only two runs scoring, and the 
Rangers would not score again.
Since you have "first four Rangers batters of the game" early in the sentence, do you need "in the first"? They'd have to be in the first inning.
Blog: I just found an interesting blog entry about adviser and advisor. I didn't realize that anyone spelled it with an "o".
Too much: The writer has packed too much information in this sentence...
Veteran Cardinals ace, and former Cy Young winner, Chris Carpenter, the 
workhorse who won his second game of the series in Game 7, called a 
meeting. 
 
 
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