Saturday, March 12, 2016

Are a team that

FOUND ONLINE: The Miami Dolphins are a team that could be looking to upgrade their backup quarterback position, as they look to shore up the depth chart behind Ryan Tannehill.

You don't need "are a team that" in this instance. If you cut that phrase out, the sentence is pretty much the same. Also, we can tighten "shore up the depth chart."


Finally, I don't like "looking" and "look" in the same sentence.


The Miami Dolphins could be looking to add a quarterback behind starter Ryan Tannehill.


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