Tuesday, June 20, 2017

Until joining Trump's Cabinet

FOUND ONLINE: Handel and Ossoff are vying to fill the seat vacated by Tom Price, who had held it since 2005, until joining Trump's Cabinet as health and human services secretary earlier this year.

The writer is trying to do too much with one sentence/paragraph. I'd split it up. Also, I'm not sure that cabinet needs to be uppercase.

Handel and Ossoff are vying for the seat vacated by Tom Price, who had held it since 2005. Price joined Trump's cabinet as health and human services secretary earlier this year.

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