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FOUND ONLINE: Astros beat Dodgers to win first World Series

I was searching for information on the World Series, and this was one of the first stories I found online. It caught my eye because the Astros didn't win the first World Series. In the first World Series, held in 1903, the Boston Americans beat the Philadelphia Athletics five games to three.

What the headline writer was trying to say was the Astros played in their first World Series and won it. They could have said this:

Astros beat Dodgers, take their first World Series title

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FOUND ONLINE: Carroll has been a coach who placed a high value on loyalty and he has been reluctant to make changes to his staff in the form of firing assistants.

This story is just too wordy. Let's try again:

Carroll has placed a high value on loyalty and has been reluctant to fire his assistants.

ALSO FOUND ONLINE: Truth be told – Landry might never dawn the aqua and teal anymore.

What was the writer thinking? I hope he meant don, not dawn.