Monday, April 12, 2010

Thank you, Barbara

BLOG LINK: Thanks to Barbara Hague for her kind words on her blog. From her web site, Barbara looks like a professional editor and proofreader.

NEEDS EDITING: He birdied the 12th hole, which was his nemesis last year as he made a run that was foiled when his tee shot went into Rae’s Creek, draining the same 20-footer that he made in 2004 when he won his first Masters.

That's a mess. The edit:

The 12th hole was his nemesis last year as his tee shot went into Rae’s Creek. This time he birdied No. 12 by draining the same 20-footer that he made in 2004 to get his first Masters victory.

It's still not perfect, but you don't have to jump around.



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