Saturday, October 2, 2010

It's all timing

I think this sentence needs a little rearranging.

Joe Kemp scored on a 24-yard pass from wide receiver D. J. Banks on a third-quarter trick play, and Tulane stunned Rutgers on Saturday, 17-14.

I'd change the last part of that sentence to Tulane stunned Rutgers 17-14 on Saturday. It's a small difference, but it helps the reader.

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