Monday, January 24, 2011

On the sideline

This sentence seems innocuous enough, but it requires a fine edit.

With his toes on the sideline, Hester caught the ball but his 11-yard return didn't hurt the Packers one bit. 

Devin Hester's toes were not on the sideline; they were near the sideline. If they'd been ON the sideline, he'd have been whistled out of bounds.

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