I realize that this is all personal preference, but I hate the use of the word team here.
As I wrote in my column from Arlington, the Green Bay Packers are a deep team, a team that showed a lot of preserverance, a team that went the long route on the road the entire length of the playoffs and played the NFL's most successful franchise and still won it all.
Another way: The Green Bay Packers are deep and persistent. They went the long route on the road to the Super Bowl, then beat the NFL's most successful franchise.
We know the Packers are a team; we don't need to hit people over the head with the fact. Besides, the writer also misspelled perseverance.><
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