Tuesday, January 3, 2012

Needs rearranging

Needs editing: The Tigers cut their deficit in half at 54-52 on a field goal by Justin Hamilton, who had a career-high 21 points, with 51 seconds remaining.

 The problem is the clause with 21 points. Let's rearrange the sentence.

Justin Hamilton, who scored a career-high 21 points, hit a field goal with 51 seconds left to cut the Tigers' deficit in half at 54-52.

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