Wednesday, January 11, 2012

Be positive

I realize it's personal preference, but this sentence bothers me.

Several reports, including Fox's spot-on Jay Glazer, said a Brady Quinn package was inserted by coach John Fox in case Tebow faltered.

I would change it this way:

Several reports, including Fox's spot-on Jay Glazer, said coach John Fox inserted a Brady Quinn package was inserted by coach John Fox in case Tebow faltered.

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