I realize it's personal preference, but this sentence bothers me.
Several reports, including Fox's spot-on Jay Glazer, said a Brady Quinn
package was inserted by coach John Fox in case Tebow faltered.
I would change it this way:
Several reports, including Fox's spot-on Jay Glazer, said coach John Fox inserted a Brady Quinn
package was inserted by coach John Fox in case Tebow faltered.
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